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Populations in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believed that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss advantage and disadvantage of this approach?

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Many people are believed that populations in developing countries increasing. For that
reason
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 some of them are now thinking to move
for
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the GM crops to increase
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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 of food production. Here will discuss both advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly
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 there are many
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 of crops food, It is available easily and cheaply.Because most of the populated countries, It is difficult to provide normal
foods
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.For any
country
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 they can easily set
maufacturing
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manufacturing
 units for food grains and that provides stable economy and
finacial
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financial
 conditions.
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 raw material required for
foods
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also
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availables
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available
 in may parts.if set manufacturing plants there are other advantages
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 like decrease jobless people, poverty, etc. On the other
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 there are some disadvantages of these
foods
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.Chances of cancer will
be increase
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 because crops
foods
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 are processed and to keep their shelf life longer,they are added preservatives.Apart from that other
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 conditions
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 we have to
sacrificed
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 like
gastric
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 problem, obesity and many more.
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Second
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 thing environment
also
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 will be affected like air and water
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 affecting other living organisms. So It seems to me that there are equal number
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od
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 pros and cons. If we want
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some thing
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 for
better
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 future, something we have to
loose
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.But
government
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 in any
conutry
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country
 will try to make more plant for
safer
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the safer
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 side.
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