Now days more and more people buy and use their own cars . Do you think the advantage of this trend for individual outweigh its disadvantages for the environment ??

Recently , purchasing own
cars
has increased in countries and abundant
people
tend to have their privet
cars
. In my view , the demerit of
this
idea is more than
the
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merit. In the following essay , the negative and positive points will be discussed . the powerful drawback of buying individual vehicles would be the fact that greenhouse gasses are created by carbon dioxide manufactured by automobiles .
Also
, global warming is occurred because of greenhouse gasses generation that melts ices from
surface
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the surface
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of rivers and ocean .
Furthermore
, many
of
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disasters can
be happened
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.
For example
, the Philippine tsunami
that
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had considerable environmental damages
such
as
extinction
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the extinction
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of some species in the ocean .
Therefore
, if the publics buy
car
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a car
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, they will have a motivation to use it rather than the public transportation that it would be harmless for the environment because of machines ' bad fuel produced and it makes the global warming .
On the other hand
, the main advantage of taking the
car
owned
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is the more
people
use individual devices , the less spacious are destroyed in the natural environment. Apparently , when
people
do not have a
car
, they have to take
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publics
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vehicles . So , it needs enough space .
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, manufacturing railways in
subway
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needs more spaces than
cars
.
Therefore
, development in
the
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public transportation can not be possible unless some natural environments are used and destroyed for the target . In conclusion , in my view , despite the fact that some regions are omitted for planning new public devices because of increasing
car
purchased ,it is harmless for the environment . Because the more
people
drive
cars
, the more global warming as environmental issues will
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Personal mobility
  • Convenience
  • Reliance
  • Public transport
  • Enhancement
  • Personal safety
  • Surge
  • Traffic congestion
  • Environmental degradation
  • Air pollution
  • Noise pollution
  • Carbon emissions
  • Global warming
  • Wildlife habitats
  • Economic impacts
  • Public transportation infrastructure
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