Now days more and more people buy and use their own cars . Do you think the advantage of this trend for individual outweigh its disadvantages for the environment ??

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Recently , purchasing own
cars
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has increased in countries and abundant
people
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tend to have their privet
cars
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. In my view , the demerits of
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idea are more than
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merit. In the following essay , the negative and positive points will be discussed . The powerful drawback of buying individual vehicles would be the fact that greenhouse gasses are created by carbon dioxide manufactured by automobiles .
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, global warming
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occurred because of greenhouse gasses generation that melts ices from
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the surface
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of rivers and ocean .
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, many
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disasters can
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happen
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.
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Philippine
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tsunami
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had considerable environmental damages
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as
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the extinction
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of some species in the ocean .
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, if the publics buy
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car
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a car
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, they will have a
motivations
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to use it rather than the public transportation that it would be harmless for
environment
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the environment
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because of machines ' bad fuel produced and it makes the global warming .
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, the main advantage of taking the
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owned
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is the more
people
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use individual devices , the less spacious are destroyed in the natural environment. Apparently , when
people
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do not have a
car
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, they have to take
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publics
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public
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vehicles . So , it needs enough space .
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, manufacturing
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railways
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rail ways
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railways
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in
subway
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the subway
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needs more spaces than
cars
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.
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public transportation can not be possible unless some natural environments are used and destroyed for the target . In conclusion , in my view , despite the fact that some regions are omitted for planning new public devices because of increasing
car
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purchased ,it is harmless for
environment
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the environment
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. Because
,
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the more
people
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drive
cars
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, the more global warming as
enviromental
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environmental
issues will
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Personal mobility
  • Convenience
  • Reliance
  • Public transport
  • Enhancement
  • Personal safety
  • Surge
  • Traffic congestion
  • Environmental degradation
  • Air pollution
  • Noise pollution
  • Carbon emissions
  • Global warming
  • Wildlife habitats
  • Economic impacts
  • Public transportation infrastructure
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