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In many coutries students take break of a year before entering into universities. What are the advantages and disadvantages.

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Today, having a year off before going to higher education levels is one of the common things for university
students
 in many nations.On the one hand, learning new
skills
 in the workplace and earning enough money for the rest of the education path are the main benefits of not going to university immediately, on the other facing health
problems
 and losing the passion for having a higher education are the main drawbacks. Working as an intern in relevant fields in some companies before entering the university will bring practical
skills
 to pupils.
Also
, having a stable monetary
situation
 is one of the key elements for
college
students
 when they have part-time jobs .
Firstly
, Some
college
students
 are hired as junior employees to work for some specific companies free of charge where they can be faced with real
problems
. So, they can learn practical
skills
 which will be used as an important element in their future study field.
Secondly
,sometimes
students
 are funded partially or get paid by their company.So, their financial
situation
 will be strong enough.
As a result
, they can participate in their courses without concern about their monetary
situation
.
However
,
students
 always be in danger of losing their enthusiasm for exceeding their journey to universities and facing different mental and physical
problems
. If the money
that is
 paid as a wage to interns is sufficient for them, pupils would enjoy
this
situation
 and drop out the
college
 before attending it.
Furthermore
, some of them just stay at home without doing anything. So,
this
situation
 would bring laziness to them with the danger of facing different mental disorders.
For instance
, a survey conducted in 2007 between 200
college
students
 in Iran and the result showed that
students
 who stayed at home for a year were more depressed rather than other
students
. In conclusion, having a job after finishing high school is not only beneficial for
students
 in terms of earning practical
skills
 but
also
 can bring some money for them to fund themselves.
However
, they are always in danger of losing their passion for going to
college
 or facing different health
problems
 by staying at home for a year.
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