🔶In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. 🔸What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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In some cultures ,it is taught

children

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that the more they try hard , the more they can be successful in reach their targets and everything that they want . In the following essay , the positive point and drawback of

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idea will be discussed . The advantage of nurture

children

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to try more and more for their gold would be a positive influence on

children

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feelings and appearing a satisfaction of

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that makes them full of

life

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and energy.Because if

children

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achieve their targets by hardworking , their motivation for

life

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will increase and

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satisfaction will appear in their

life

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, if a son who tries to play

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guitar is successful in playing it and music , he will be full of

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and determination in his

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, teaching

children

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to be hard work to earn their favourite has a positive influence on their

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. Creating depression in

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can be the disadvantage of

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are lessened if they try hard, everything will be in their hands .

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, it is the nature of human

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that they can not achieve everything in the world even by abundant struggling .

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a toddler

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should be learned the broken is a part of

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, if people try more to their favourites while they can not be successful it will hurt their emotions and they are depressed.

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, trying more to rich target is taught to a girl who is a disabled person and can not pain.So she paints and can not be good at it that hurts her feelings. In conclusion , creating satisfaction of situation is the advantage of telling

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if they try more , they will be able to earn everything .

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, there is a negative point

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as depression because of the broken in

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idea.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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🔶In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. 🔸What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Your opinion

Many cities are currently facing a serious housing shortage. What are some of the reasons for this shortage and what solution can you suggest.

Some people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries, shop and on public transport, others argue that people should be free to use their mobiles wherever they like. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?