Some people think that children under 18 years old should receive full-time education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Providing a full-time class for students below 18-years old has been adopted by many countries;
however
, I partially agree with
this
statement.
This
because
children
under 12 years of
age
may not be suitable for
this
program as they require more free time to explore their natural environment. The primary reason why teenagers are the most preferred category of
full-day
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the full-day
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class is that they are both mentally and physically mature enough when compares
them
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apply

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with
the
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younger learners. Since those
who
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aged between 13 and 18’s had a better understanding
why
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education is significant, they seem to concentrate more seriously than their juniors. To illustrate
this
, when you observe mature
children
who tend to maintain not only classroom discipline but follow instructions as well. Eventually, they are well-understood the value of knowledge, I,
thus
, firmly consider the whole-day classes would be appropriate for teenage students than their juniors.
Secondly
,
school going
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children
at
primary
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a primary

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level requires small sessions than longer
one
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due to their short span of attention as well as their
age
.
In other words
, as the novice widely interested to learn about their surrounding, which is a universal tendency, and they mainly start exploring at the
age
of 3 to 12 years. As full-time classrooms may demotivate them and limit their wisdom within the closed area, if
this
mode can be instructed after 12 years of
age
, it would more beneficial. In the UK,
for instance
, primary schools
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been functioning only 2-3 hours,
moreover
,
children
are highly productive as well, regarding Indian pupils. In conclusion, even though
long- class
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hours are vital for any education system, all students may not be apt for
this
as their growth and development may not be up to the level.
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