Since Most information about culture and history can be found online, museums are no longer needed.  To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Few citizens
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that with help of
Internet
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the Internet
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individuals can get any detail about history and traditions nowadays.
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,
the
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museums
are not necessary these days.
However
, the internet images can not take place of practical view. For that reason,
i
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completely disagree with
this
notion.
Museum
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plays an essential role to represent the old era. There are several
reason
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to
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why it is important. The
first
and major reason is, people can get practically view of ancient things. With the help of images people only can get theoretical knowledge and
imaginary
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an imaginary
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view of any object whereas in
museum
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the museum
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they can know about objects on
certain
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basis. Another point to
be consider
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that, it is a tourist attraction. Museum has too much attraction of tourism. Due to it, it is
a
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beneficial for
country’s
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the country’s
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economy. These days foreign tourists mostly prefer to know about the nation’s ancient things.
Hence
, they travel
museums
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on
certain
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basis and with the taxes from visitors fees the government can earn money.
For instance
, India
know
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for that tradition and old era. There
are
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number
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a number
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of popular national leaders they had. They conducted a survey
last
year about travellers who visit that country. In
that
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they showed 75% of international tourists visited
museums
in different cities and tried to know about their culture. To conclude, in
this
modern era, people have
busy
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a busy
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schedule they do not have time to visit
museums
but to know about their old culture is a duty for everyone
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therefore
museums
are needed.
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