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In some countries, crime rates are increasing. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done about it?

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Today, some nations are experiencing
the
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 rise
of
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 the rate of illegal activities.
This
 essay looks at the causes of
this
 issue and suggests some solutions. One of the agents behind the growth of crime rates in several countries is poverty. To illustrate, in some counties in Africa, theft is rampant because citizens there do not have the ability to earn
money
 on their own and live in dire conditions. Another factor is the lack of parental guidance
to
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 youngsters. These days,
parents
 in several nations are too busy working to spend a lot of time with their
children
.
As a result
,
children
 cannot be taught what
behavior
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 is acceptable or not in their society, causing them to misbehave. There are two possible ways to tackle
this
 problem. One is for
governments
 to introduce the system of basic income. If people receive some amount of
money
 from their
governments
 every month,
this
 can alleviate the problem of poverty, the root cause of some illegitimate activities. The other solution is to provide financial aid to families with
children
. Nurturing youngsters
costs
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tremendous
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 amount of
money
.
Therefore
,
parents
 are forced to work for long hours at the expense of the time spent with their
children
. Some
money
 from
governments
 can lead to the increase of the time that
parents
 use with their
children
 because the
money
 will enable them to reduce the
amount
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 of hours they spend working. To conclude, the problem of poverty and the shortage of moral guidance
parents
 instil in their
children
 result in the rise of the percentage of crime in certain countries. To make the situation better,
governments
 should offer financial assistance to those who do not have the source of enough income as well as
parents
 with
children
.
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