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In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Health
 is one of the basic need of every human and the majority of countries have the policies to fully take
care
 of all the
health
 requirements of their population.
However
, with the advent of modern
health
care
 technology, increasing
age
 is considered a burden on the budget and many lawmakers are talking against it nowadays. They opined that nation should pay themselves for
this
 service or should pay heavy taxes at a young
age
 to utilise
this
 facility. I strongly opposed
this
 opinion and firmly believe that
this
 is a basic right of every person to enjoy high standard medical facilities at every
age
.
Firstly
, as we all know, it is the common man who works day and night to build up the
country
's economy from early ages.
Moreover
, he pays heavy taxes to make the
country
 a better place to live and stays abide by the law. All
this
, he does for the betterment of the State, so definitely it's the duty of the government to take
care
 of him in his old
age
.
Secondly
, a
country
 is founded and
then
 run and prosper through the hard work of its people and not by itself. The development of the population is considered to be the development of the
country
. If any state failed to contribute to the development of its people, it will be considered a failure of the
country
. No one can snatch
this
 basic necessity from old
age
 people. In a nutshell, it is the right of every citizen to have accessibility to the best of all
health
care
 facilities and it should be available to them from the
first
 day of their life to their
last
 day. There should be no doubt that
this
 old population is our asset who had long served our
country
 and should be given its share .
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