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Behavior in schools is getting worse. explain the causes of this problem and suggest some possible solutions.

#behavior #schools
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In the modern era, schools are much different than they have 50 years back.
Children’s
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behaviour
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 in school is
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 changed and getting worst day by day. Indeed, there should be some protocols that
parents
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 and children should follow to maintain the decorum of the school. In
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 essay, I will shed light on the root causes of
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 kind of
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 and suggest some measures how to deal with these kinds of situations. Indeed, there are several causes of bad
behaviour
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 and the current epidemic of disrespect among students.
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,
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 are busier than before, a breadwinner has to go to work and mothers are busy with household things, so in
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 situation, kids are feeling alone, and indulge themself in bad companies.
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, increase
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 time of the social media, as children are free to browse content on social media channels, they quickly get exposure to the content
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 not age-appropriate.
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 to that, it
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 increases FOMO and feelings of inadequacy, dissatisfaction, and isolation. In turn, these feeling affects
children’s
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behaviour
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. Clearly,
parents
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 need to take some action to control these kinds of activities.
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 and foremost,
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 need to schedule their timetable according to their
children’s
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 timetable and spend time with them.
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 to that, discuss their problems and try to rectify that.
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, create some protocols for social media
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 when to
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, where to
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, and what they are watching.
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, kids not like protocols, it will be helpful for them in the future. Along with
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 it
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 helps to improve
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behaviour
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. In conclusion, no matter how much schools get modernise, children should follow basic athletes and
parents
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 need no be more focus on their kids’
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 as its will impact their future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discipline
  • Respect for authority
  • Confrontational
  • Cyberbullying
  • Overcrowded
  • Curriculum
  • Engagement
  • Mental health
  • Parental involvement
  • Social-emotional learning (SEL)
  • Classroom management
  • Trusting environment
  • Anxiety
  • Stress
  • Behavioral intervention
  • Facilities
  • Resource allocation
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