Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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How to reduce
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rates in society either sentencing a prolonged jail term or adopting other methods is divided people into two;
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too. On the one side, those supporting
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culprits argue that
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, when sentencing
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term, they could, hardly, released back to society in their
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, many convicts, who
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living
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now, have advised potential culprits unless they have committing mistakes, they will not end up
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having a terrible
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could encourage a rethinking regarding the
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they have committed: the authority may benefit from the unpaid work because these workers need to be paid as
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is a punishment. In Kerala, to illustrate
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, there are some young boys who violated traffic rule was served in a community welfare
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,
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of prosecuting.
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, I think that minor crimes can be punished by offering volunteer services, but categories,
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as terrorists, murders, espionage must be given corporal punishment, so the government may require a small fund to handle
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than
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imprisonments. In conclusion,
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long custody, and others prefer
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, but I firmly think it should be based
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of
crime
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history. It is vital that the government should make an appropriate decision on
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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