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The only way to improve safety of our roads is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traffic
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 safety measures have long been on the government’s agenda worldwide. Some people argue that to make
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 travel safer,
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 has to punish drivers more harshly if they break the
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law
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. I agree with the view that punishment can help curb
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offenses
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offences
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, but it should not be taken as the only solution. Admittedly,
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severe punishment is vital considering its deterrent effect on those who are likely to disobey
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 regulations.
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, Australia is one of the safest
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 all over the world. In
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 country,
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 violators are fined more seriously than some other
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. An instance is drivers will be detained if they are found to have drunk driving and a severe fine will be applied for
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 rather than just verbal warning in some other places.
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, drivers and pedestrians become more aware of
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 laws and demonstrate improved
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 compliance, since they know the serious consequences of their risky actions.
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, despite the importance of imposing harsh regulations, the authorities should not overlook other options that may sometimes achieve better outcomes. One salient example is that raising the legal driving age could contribute to the improvement of
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 safety. It is seen that youths are legally allowed to drive after 16 or 17 in some
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 and United Kingdom.
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, teenagers are usually more impetuous but less mature than adults,
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 are more likely to disobey the
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 regulations.
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, increasing the legal driving age to 21.5 in
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 with high
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 accident rates could enhance young people’s awareness of
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 since they have more time for training. In conclusion, the apparent effectiveness of the harsher punishment measures on
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 offenders should be acknowledged.
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,
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 is not the only way that achieves better and safer usage of roads. An integrated approach should be adopted
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 as raising the legal driving age.

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