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Some people believe that it is good to shere as much information as possible in scientific research, bussiness, and academic world, others believe that some informations is too important or to valuable to share freely.

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Several
people
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 have trust that scientific
research
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,
business
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, and academic
world
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information
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 has to be shared as much as it can.
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 some
people
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 argue that the essential pieces of
information
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 have not to share everywhere because is too precious, I argue that
people
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 in
this
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world
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 have to get
information
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 and news in the whole
world
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 about scientific
research
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,
business
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 and academic to upgrade their
knowledge
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. Scientific
research
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,
business
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 and the academic
world
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 are important for
people
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,
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 because the
information
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 of it will build
people
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 to grow up their mind and to do a lot of things that will help
people
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’s need;
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, scientific
research
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 and the academic
world
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 can be very important for final year students to do their thesis. According to the topic that he chooses, he makes the scientific
research
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 and academic
world
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 his citation. Bits of
knowledge
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 about a
business
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 will create many new businessmen comes up.
Business
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 is very general for
people
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 and many
people
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 don’t know about it.
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,
knowledge
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 about the
business
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 will make
people
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 literate and practice it;
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,
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business's
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knowledge
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 contains in social media like TikTok makes
people
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 modified and wants to implicate it in the real
world
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.
Information
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 has a huge effect on
people
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 to make something’s right or wrong. So, several
people
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 believe that some
information
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 is too precious if
this
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 becomes too public and make it free access for
people
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. There are many
people
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 in
this
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world
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 that do kind of wrong things because of the
information
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 that they got
last
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.
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 of using scientific
research
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 as a citation, some final students just do wrong things that just do couples of copy from the citation to their thesis and makes their thesis got copyright. To conclude, it is educational and cultural progress that matters compared to that of an economy.
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 economic progress plays an important role, I believe that there are some of other types progress,
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 as education and culture,
that is
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 more important.
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