In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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hypertension, which could be the most popular

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issues around the world.

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, these problems are sharing some common factors, one of them is

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obesity and

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it better. The faster our days go, the shorter we

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the problem has landed on us, setting on your desk all day and trying to make some money by doing overtime is not a good idea for your body and your

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that money you are making will be lost while you are

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issues which caused by your ignorance.

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, we are

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that does not give attention to what we put in our mouth, we just eat what is in front of us and

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we just hang out with our friends in our free time.

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the bright side, some people and some

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community awareness by a

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, some famous sporters are posting on their personal social accounts about how to maintain your

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and showing their followers some pics while doing

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in order to motivate them

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their journey.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

336 words

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obesity
overweight
physical activity
sedentary lifestyle
exercise
unhealthy diet
fast food
urbanization
modernization
stress
awareness
education
government intervention
policies
promotion
sports
fitness programs
health education
taxation
public transportation
infrastructure
parks
recreational spaces

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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Fully explain your ideas

some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one can have the opportunity to help others

Many people believe that social networking sites ike Facebook have had a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree. sive reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words

Competitiveness is generally considered a good quality for people to have in society. Do you think it is a positive development or negative trend? how does competitiveness affect individuals?

in education and employment, some people work harder than others. why do some people work harder? is it always a good thing to work harder?

Should humans adapt to technology or should technology be adapted to us? Is technology making us intellectually weaker or more intelligent? Discuss both views and give your point of view?