In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
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relaise
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realise
health
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that money you are making will be lost while you are Add a comma
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veraity
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variety
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.
In conclusion, I think there will be a time when we will relaise
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outcome and take it seriousley
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