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It is necessary for parents to attend a parenting training course to bring their children up. Do you agree or disagree.

#parents #course #children
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These days in many countries short term courses related to parenting has been increased enormously. While some believe that taking parenting course will help in upbringing the
children
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. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the statement that
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 need a course to raise their
children
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 because raising the
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 is an inbuilt quality that so many
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 possess. On the one hand, all over the planet, there is a huge rise in nuclear families and
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 won't seek any advice from their
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 or grandparents.
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, they believe that these training centre have better knowledge than their family members. In India,
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, the younger generation parent's are not obeying the instructions of their family,
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 they are preferring to go to parenting courses more. A recent study, made by Delhi University reveals that the training centres related to parenting in 2010 is just 2% but
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 rate has been increased to 20% in 2010 which means
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 has been increased by 10 times in just one decade.
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, a lot of people believes that there is no requirement for any training to raise their
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.
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, most people think that it is an inbuilt quality of a mother to raise
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. In Japan,
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, they depend on their
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 or grandparents to take of their kids when they are away from their
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 due to work, business or any other business.
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, in Japan, there is no single training centre till now. In conclusion,
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 many believe that joining a parenting course is more beneficial, in my view, it is not required due to following reasons,
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, because living with
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 and grandparents will help more than the crash courses and
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, no matter what raising a child is an inbuilt quality.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parenting training
  • child-rearing
  • valuable guidance
  • effective techniques
  • child development
  • psychology
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