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Planting Trees Is Very Important. Some People Say That Trees Should Be Planted In The Vacant Areas Of Towns .Do you agree or disagree?

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Planting trees in the abandoned
city
 surroundings is considered
as
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vital, according to some.
Although
this
 could have some benefits to the place, I disagree to a larger degree as the plots seem to be utilized constructing either buildings or
play grounds
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playgrounds
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.
This
 essay shall support my views and
then
 includes a conclusion. WheneverConstructing some skyscrapers brings more advantages to the empty land as
this
 attracts
astonishing
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 amount
foreign
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of foreign
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 investment.
Firstly
, owning to these developments, largely upgrade the entire area
into
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a
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next
 level. Another point here is that
by
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expanding
city
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the city
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,
this
stop
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 the problem of insufficient space for development,
for example
: educational institutions, medical centres, and research laboratories.
However
, if trees were planted,
this
 place could not have been converted into a business
center
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centre
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, so I think
number
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a number
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 of plants in the forest is sufficient, under no circumstance should vacant
placed
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places
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 utilized for planting these.
Nevertheless
, opponents of the
above-argument
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above argument
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tends
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 to argue that, trees could provide a green space for
city
 dwellers and it can detoxify pollution of carbon
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dioxide
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di oxide
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dioxide
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;
this
 rarely happens with newly planted seeds.
Conversely
, being built, ply grounds could have a long-lasting positive to
city
 residences, where they could participate
some
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in some
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 intense exercises. To illustrate
this
,
different
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 parts of the world, many countries have started constructing modern grounds to motivate
its
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their
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 people
engage
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some
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in some
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 strenuous
work-out
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;
thus
, it is a proven method. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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 building parks and high rise constructions can be fruitful despite people have
different
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a different
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 opinion on how to utilize vacant plots in cities.
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