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How online media has changed local culture give your views

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Social media has become popular these days because of its user-friendly feature.In other ,words the whole world is on a finger trip thanks to the
platform
. But it has both adverse and beneficial impacts on our culture. Through
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 I would like to bring forth my option on the shared subject. On the one hand, it has given us a
platform
 to communicate with each other anywhere at any time in the world.It has increased the connection with
people
 and society.
For instance
, you have an option to send or receive a message, upload your pictures, videos, show your friends and loved ones your live location.
In addition
, it has given a
platform
 for entrepreneurs to promote their products and development of online shopping which is meant to increase their sales. It is possible to buy anything
such
 as food, clothes , home decor etcetera and
people
 fond of buying stuff online these days . It has given us a chance to become friends with our favourite celebrities, artists and to know more about their day to day life.
Furthermore
, it has provided us
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way to check the weather and news forecast.
On the contrary
, it is true that it has influenced our culture in negative ways .
People
 share inappropriate pictures and videos on the portal. ,
Also
 they started sharing their views on religion and community which turned the arguments on the
platform
 for a long time.Youngsters spend lots of time chatting with each other. The worst part is that sometimes they start sharing tons of unnecessary information which is bullying and increased harassment .
People
 make negative comments about anything to anyone. To sum up, social media has its advantages and disadvantages . But it all depends on the user at the end .Excess use of anything is harmful and the same thing applies to social media.
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