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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies.Do the advantages of studying abroad outweighed the disadvantages?

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In recent times, the rate at which foreign
students
 travel overseas to study is on the increase.I agree that the advantage outweighs the disadvantagebecauseot increase knowledge which promotes the student's learning ability. To start with, travelling outside one's own country to
further
 in education increase knowledge,
this
 is because overseas have appropriate technology which is made accessible to
students
.The lecturer is aware that all the
students
 cannot assimilate at the same pace
hence
 they teach in a way that the majority of the learners will understand. The instructor provides teaching aids
such
 as laptops,graphs for the
students
 and pictorial materials
also
 ensure
students
 see the object themselves for them to remember.
Hence
,
this
 will make the
students
to
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be involved in participating during lectures.
For instance
, research conducted in Uk showed that 90% of postgraduates
students
 tend to be interested in mathematics because of the counting materials that were provided by the u.k government.
On the other hand
, foreign-trained are faced with many challenges which include mental health disorders like depression and boredom. Literally,most of these learner's does not have the time to relate well with their loved one's on phone and sometimes they can't ventilate what they are experiencing because of the communication gap,
this
 predisposed them to have a mental breakdown.
For example
, according to American association of mental health nurses in
the
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2020 ,journal it was said that 75% of depressed patients are a foreigner. To conclude,the challenges faced by foreign
students
 do not hold much significance compared to the knowledge acquired.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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