The internet has caused people to be isolated from their rea lives. Do you agree or disagree?
For a few years, the agreement with
internet
dominates the world. People
of all age groups are addicted to it. They are isolated from their lives. I am completely
Change the adverb
complete
Change preposition
in
this
statement because nowadays, everyone spends more time
on the internet
rather than socialize with others.
To begin
with, many e-commerce websites
available on the internet
. These websites
offer products of everything. The predominant benefits are their prices are low, share coupons and time
Remove the redundancy
apply
time
discount on every products
. Change to a singular noun
product
People
are spending more time
on it to buy best
offers and prices Correct article usage
the best
instead
go to the market with friends and family, running around shop
to shop for good deals. Add an article
the shop
For example
, Flipkart and Amazon are the big websites
and they offers
heavy discount on Change the verb form
offer
smartphone
, watch and many other products. Consumers are checking these Add an article
a smartphone
the smartphone
websites
for
all day and night to get Change preposition
apply
this
deals and put them in a home on the Correct determiner usage
these
internet
, they become isolated from others.
Furthermore
, social media is the
another cause Remove the article
apply
people
Change preposition
for people
to
be isolated. Many Fix the infinitive
apply
youngster
Change to a plural noun
youngsters
are
available on Instagram,Facebook, and Youtube. They need more likes and subscribers to become popular across the globe, they spend most of the Change the verb form
is
time
to make
videos and click pictures to get more likes from the followers. In spite of making friends in the real Change the verb form
making
life
they make friends on the Add a comma
,life
internet
. Moreover
, children are obessed
with online games. They put themself Correct your spelling
obsessed
onto
the game Change preposition
into
slavery
. Change preposition
of slavery
For instance
, in India, teenagers are spending more time
on
playing PUBG game. In Change preposition
apply
a recent
Remove the article
recent news
a piece of recent news
news
few children are addicted to it and they have physical problems Add a comma
,news
such
as back pain and neck pain. All
Add a hyphen
All-time
time
at home cause them isolated from social life.
In conclusion, everything has some positive and negative views. At present time
, the internet
has more bane that cause
Change the verb form
causes
people
to become the internet
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