The internet has caused people to be isolated from their rea lives. Do you agree or disagree?

For a few years, the
internet
dominates the world.
People
of all age groups are addicted to it. They are isolated from their lives. I am
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agreement with
this
statement because nowadays, everyone spends more
time
on the
internet
rather than socialize with others.
To begin
with, many e-commerce
websites
available on the
internet
. These
websites
offer products of everything. The predominant benefits are their prices are low, share coupons and
time
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time
discount on every
products
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product
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.
People
are spending more
time
on it to buy
best
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offers and prices
instead
go to the market with friends and family, running around
shop
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to shop for good deals.
For example
, Flipkart and Amazon are the big
websites
and they
offers
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heavy discount on
smartphone
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a smartphone
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, watch and many other products. Consumers are checking these
websites
for
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all day and night to get
this
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deals and put them in a home on the
internet
, they become isolated from others.
Furthermore
, social media is
the
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another cause
people
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for people
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to
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be isolated. Many
youngster
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youngsters
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are
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is
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available on Instagram,Facebook, and Youtube. They need more likes and subscribers to become popular across the globe, they spend most of the
time
to make
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videos and click pictures to get more likes from the followers. In spite of making friends in the real
life
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they make friends on the
internet
.
Moreover
, children are
obessed
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obsessed
with online games. They put themself
onto
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the game
slavery
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of slavery
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.
For instance
, in India, teenagers are spending more
time
on
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playing PUBG game. In
a recent
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news
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few children are addicted to it and they have physical problems
such
as back pain and neck pain.
All
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time
at home cause them isolated from social life. In conclusion, everything has some positive and negative views. At present
time
, the
internet
has more bane that
cause
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causes
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people
to become the
internet
slave.
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