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In recent years,” responsible tourists” have paid attention to preserving both culture and environmrnt of the places thay visit. However, some poelpe say that it is impossible to be a “responsible tourist”. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the rise in tourists and tourism,
people
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 who call themselves "responsible tourists" have emerged, who claim that they pay attention to preserving both the culture and environment of the places they visit,
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, some
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 argue that it is impossible to be a responsible
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This
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 essay will look into why I think
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 can be responsible tourists and how it is not impossible to be
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,
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 can be a responsible
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 by knowing about the general laws of a
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 he/she travels to,
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 way he/she can make sure to not cause any problems in the
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 they are travelling to.
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,
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 can be a responsible
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 by paying attention and preserving the environment. To be specific, not littering and not damaging the flora and fauna of the
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 you are travelling to can make you a responsible
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, when visiting a flower sanctuary on my trip to Thailand, I made sure to not pluck any flowers and observe them from a distance.
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,
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 can be a responsible
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 by simply not damaging the monuments and buildings. Monuments and buildings of a
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 preserve the
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's culture and heritage, destroying them by means of scribbling or damaging them would be the actions of an irresponsible
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, I have seen
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 scribble on monuments like the Taj Mahal which disrespects the culture and heritage of the
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 of my
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,
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 can be a responsible
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 by being kind to the
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 who live in that
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,
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 must respect their place and them.
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, I think
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 should be mindful and aware of the
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 they are travelling to if they want to be a responsible
tourist
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task achievement
Make sure to elaborate more on your points to achieve greater depth and completeness in your essay. Your ideas are clear, but they could be made more comprehensive with more details, examples, or explanations.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical structure of your essay by using more transitional phrases and connectors to smoothly guide the reader from one point to the next.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which helps in guiding the reader.
task achievement
You used specific examples to support your main points, which strengthened your arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Responsible tourism
  • Cultural preservation
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Off-peak season travel
  • Local economy
  • Carbon offset
  • Waste reduction
  • Wildlife conservation
  • Respecting local customs
  • Cultural erosion
  • Commercialization of cultures
  • Mass tourism
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