The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts give information about the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen
Island
,
according to
a tourist poll
According to
tourist
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a tourist
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poll, Bowen
Island
has attracted
them
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apply
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by
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the 2 most special
things
are
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the scenery and the
people
with 35 and 42
percent
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per cent
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respectively. The proportion of
people
who feel satisfied with their accommodation is about 11
percent
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per cent
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and
this
as
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is
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an advantage. It has 12
percent
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per cent
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of
people
think that
culture
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the culture
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of the
island
is an essential attraction.
However
, there are
few
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a few
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things
that affect tourist satisfaction, especially is
high
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the high
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cost of living
with
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at
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50
percent
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per cent
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.
Besides
, the authorities were not taken responsibility for the entertainment,
that
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which
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must be a huge omission. 10 and 15
percent
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per cent
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is the worst number for
two
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the two
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remain
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remaining
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things
: weather and food quality. So that
this
island
must have changed a lot in the future. In conclusion, I believe that most
people
like Bowen
Island
because of the
people
and the scenery.
However
, there should be some
things
that need to be changed
such
as the cost of living
is
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being
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too high or the quality of the food
is
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being
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so bad.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, however".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, things, people, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • According to the survey
  • Visitors reported
  • The pie charts show
  • The most common advantages/disadvantages
  • A significant proportion
  • A small percentage
  • In contrast
  • Notably
  • The largest segment
  • Similarly
  • On the other hand
  • A major advantage/disadvantage
  • To highlight
  • Overall effect
  • Impact the experience
  • In summary
  • Illustrates
  • Reflects
  • Highlights
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