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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#education #healthcare #government
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While I believe that
education
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 and
healthcare
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 should be funded by the
government
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, I
also
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 assume that all of that
welfare
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 should not be free for everyone. In my own opinion, I think that
people
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 should fund a part of their
education
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 and
healthcare
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 fees, about twenty-five
percent
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per cent
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 to fifty
percent
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per cent
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. On the one hand, the
government
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 should create some
welfare
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 for
people
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 because there is a massive quantity of poverty, they are unable to pay for schooling and medical care.
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, the life support that comes from the
government
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 will help many
people
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 have a chance to go to school or cure serious diseases.
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, another form of paying for
education
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 is the scholarship for intelligent
students
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. The awarding of many
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 scholarships to create opportunities for those who want to study abroad will motivate
students
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 to learn harder. For the above reasons, the
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 that the
government
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 pays for local lives is curial.
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, if the
government
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 fund all the fees of
healthcare
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 and
education
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 for their citizens,
people
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 might not regard it. An example of my statement, in case that
students
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 don’t have to pay tuition, they can become distracted from studying. The reason for
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 status is some
students
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 just hard-working in learning because they don’t want to waste tuition, which is their parents'
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 or their own
money
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 earned from part-time jobs.
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, when the
government
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 pays too many fees for
welfare
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, the state budget may become severely deficient.
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, the opinion that "
education
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 and
healthcare
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 should be funded by the
government
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 and free for everyone" is unrealistic. In conclusion, I strongly agree that the
government
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 should support the citizen’s lives by setting reasonable social
welfare
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 policies, paying part of the
money
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 for schooling and medical examinations.
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,
people
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 still need to pay their subsistence to take more responsibility for their own lives and to support the nation's economy.
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