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In some countries there is not enough recycling of waste materials (eg paper, glass, and cans) What are the reasons and solutions?

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Some countries are not involved in recycling like others. I believe that it is because
people
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 lack the knowledge of recycling process, and it can be unaffordable.
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, introducing
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recycling
 as a subject in schools, and investing in
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 area can help to tackle these issues. Many
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 do not know how to do
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recycling
. It is because neither they
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 nor their parents learned about it from their early ages at school. Some
people
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 cannot even distinguish different types of waste materials, so they throw them into the same garbage cans. Many countries have trash containers based on different categories of litter, so they can be used
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easily to make something new. Another reason to consider is that recycling can be an expensive process. Some countries may not afford
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 materials, production equipment, and
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workforce required for
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 process.
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, the businesses that engage in recycling
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 not common in Azerbaijan
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 lack of the aforementioned resources. In order to address the first problem, the government should
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incorporate
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that is
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 dedicated to recycling in schools, so children can learn about it. It can be beneficial to
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 of
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 action in children and
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guide
 them to apply their knowledge in real life.
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, generations who are more aware
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 the environmental issues can be raised. In terms of the second issue, the
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government
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 to allocate funds to implement recycling projects. Investing in
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 area may help to reduce production, material, and employment costs.
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 can encourage
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 to engage in
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 sector and contribute to
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 sector.
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, many young
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 in my country try to initiate a business to recycle and reuse the product,
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sufficient money to start.
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, it can be
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 opportunity to attract young minds to contribute to the development of
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 sphere. In conclusion,
people
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's knowledge can be restricted in terms of recycling, and it can be quite costly.
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, the government can address these issues by teaching the methods of recycling in schools and sparing
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 for
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task response
To improve task response, provide more specific examples and evidence to support the points made. For instance, instead of a general statement about Azerbaijan, provide data or quotes from credible sources.
task response
For clearer ideas, use transitions between points within paragraphs. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. Use linking words and phrases to maintain a continuous thread of thought throughout the essay.
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Introduce more specific details in the body paragraphs to support the main points. This could involve statistics, case studies, or anecdotes that provide a richer context.
coherence cohesion
Make sure that the main ideas in your conclusion are mirrored in the introduction to provide a cohesive structure to your essay.
structure
Your essay is well-structured with clear introduction and conclusion paragraphs.
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You have identified relevant reasons and solutions for the problem of inadequate recycling.
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Good effort on providing potential solutions and explaining their benefits.
language use
Language and grammar are solid, with only minor lapses that do not hinder understanding.

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Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

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  • such as
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