The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken legally. What are the advantages and disadvantages of learning one language in the world?

Tourism is
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for a country’s economy, which attracts people from all over the world.
has been considered/developed into the most important
in the world where a few sections of society opine that
is the only
to be spoken lawfully. In
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both advantages and drawbacks of having one
in the world.
To begin
with, considering
as the only means of communication to be used legitimately has proven to be beneficial to all countries in many ways.
, it helps in communicating effectively and sharing information about businesses, resources and their ideas which lead to economy growth.
For instance
, China has
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of resources
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attract many countries to exchange goods. It not only connects people but
maintain friendly relations with foreign countries and make peace with them. At
point, tourism is a social, cultural and economical phenomenon where
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revenue will be raised.
trending as
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the global
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system of communication can be detrimental for all other languages which will come to
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extinction. Eventually, it will cause a natural death of the culture and vernacular
of that region and country. For
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, tourism has no meaning if it cannot showcase its culture with local
and unable to portray its heritage. In conclusion, being an evident benefit of
becoming universal
leads to global growth, but it
has its disadvantages that it doesn’t incorporate the customs which are preserved by ancestors to inherit.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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