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Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by some that online reading
materials
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 are better for educating
children
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, while others think that
materials
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 on paper should be used for educational purposes.
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children
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 should use online
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 for learning. On the one hand, online
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 provide better accessibility. Almost every family has an access to a computer and the Internet, meaning that any educational reading
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 may be found at any convenient time. Being able to found quickly the topic of interest lead to better performance during the
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 as
children
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 do not
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 their concentration.
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, as webpages can be adjustable by font size,
children
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 do not have problems with their vision and the tension in their eyes by the end of the
study
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. So convenient access to
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 and individually adjustable fonts make some people think that online is a better way for
children
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 to
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.
On the other hand
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,
children
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 who use printed
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 are found less distractive and more concentrated on their education. Indeed, having a particular printed topic in their hands, they simply cannot read anything else other than educational
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.
This
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.
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, for some of
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 tactile sensation helps in being more focused on
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,
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 they perceive information better when they have a book in their hand. In my opinion, online
materials
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 are far way better rather than printed. I believe that being able to set up a webpage appropriately using different fonts and
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 for a
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 reading and find educational information easily at any time improve learning for
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. In conclusion,
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 some people believe that having printed
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helps
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children
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 to stay more focused on their subjects, I believe that
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 advantages as accessibility and adjustability of online
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 make it more suitable for educating
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online reading materials
  • printed materials
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • technology
  • convenience
  • interactivity
  • accessibility
  • visual appeal
  • physical books
  • parental guidance
  • digital skills
  • screen time
  • learning experience
  • personal preference
  • comprehension
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • word recognition
  • grammar
  • vocabulary development
  • reading habits
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