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In some countries, the quality of life in larger cities is declining. Why do you think this is happening? What measures can be taken to stop it?

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Of late, many metropolitan
cities
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 around the world have experienced a reduction in the quality of
life
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. Some
people
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 attribute
this
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 phenomenon to the expansion of virtual
life
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 accoutrements and a general drop in social cohesion. The quality of
life
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 has actually been noticed to fall constantly due to continuous expansion of population in major
cities
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 and overburdening on
resources
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 available and the cutthroat competition these issues led to. I will
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 discuss the reasons behind the captioned problem along with the probable measures to tackle it.
Firstly
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, big
cities
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, nowadays, have metamorphosized into perpetually awakening beasts with an undying hunger for
resources
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 and emanating commotion. A continuous migration from rural areas to
cities
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 has been observed in the
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 decades,
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 constant addition in population is conspicuously stressing the
resources
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 available
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 as accommodation, drinkable water, sanitation and waste management.
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, the city planning now has limited scope for major changes, as
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, increased density cannot be dealt with effectively and congestion is evident. Resultantly, there's a paucity of green and public spaces.
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, the social fabric of
cities
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 is almost charred with no or rare social cohesion observed only in certain patches of the
cities
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. The lack of public places, long working hours, independent small families, and career obsession has resulted in isolated living and no social bonding.
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,
people
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 nowadays spent an abominable amount of time on social media developing a fake virtual
life
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 whereas truly they have almost no friends.
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, during stressful times
people
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 often have nobody to bank upon and subject themselves to pressurized mental conditions.
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, the happiness quotient evidently falls. To sum up, increased pressure on
resources
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, skyrocketing competition, and absent social fabric are the main causes of diminishing
life
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 quality in
cities
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. An expansion of city borders and sectoral planning could help in providing better living standards along with green and public places for the public which might result in increased communication and affinity among
people
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. Social events could
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 be arranged for increased public inclusion. Notwithstanding the difficulties,
people
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 often take less time to develop a bond with their fellow state members.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Overpopulation
  • Infrastructure
  • Pollution
  • Housing shortages
  • Rental and property prices
  • Traffic congestion
  • Public transportation
  • Deforestation
  • Urban sprawl
  • Mental health
  • Economic disparity
  • Waste management
  • Environmental impact
  • Public health
  • Recreational areas
  • Wealth gap
  • Cost of living
  • Lifestyle
  • Stress
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