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Violence in media promotes violence. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that nowadays the
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 frequently broadcasts violent
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. Meanwhile, some
people
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 believe that
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 trend promotes violence in society. In
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 essay, I will explain why I do not agree with
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 idea. On average,
people
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 spend 3 to 4 hours watching TV every day;
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, It would be correct to say that everything promoted through the
media
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 affects
people
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's behaviour.
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,
people
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 perceive movies and other
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content
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 through their own understanding of what is right and what is wrong. More specifically, individuals predisposed to cruelty will be cruel regardless of the
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 exposure. Violent behaviour is a complex issue, with a host of different factors
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 as peer pressure, family environment, and etc.
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, it is well known that children imitate their parents.
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, if parents are violent their children will more likely be like them.
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, there is a higher chance that
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 living in poverty and experiencing despair will become criminals rather than those who watch movies about criminals. On the negative side, cruelty in cartoons can be perceived by children as a normal reality, since they are still not able to differentiate between what is good and what is bad. Even so, I can say from my own experience that violence in the
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 did not make me cruel.
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, I was always sorry for Jarry for frequently experiencing pain. To sum up, I would concede that violent
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 may harm the mental health of younger ones to some extend. Despite that, I am considered that the main cause of cruelty in society is not related to the
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content
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.
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