Many today feel that most urgent problems can only be solved by international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In my perspective, there will be a lot of dilemmas that

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during our lives that the government need to deal with

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, even important obstacle or small issue. Depending on

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the severity of each situation, the government will decide the right way to tackle everything. In some ,cases we will need the support of international cooperation, but some just require the decision in an individual country. The

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primary concern that everyone is facing right now is

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, a virus that makes

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death

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increase nonstop, every day we have thousands of people on the earth passway.

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of facing

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health issue individually, all countries in nature are now gathering together to find

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vaccine to deal with

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international problem. Nowadays, there are some vaccines from countries that successfully research a method that

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people to limit the risk of death. Despite the fact that there are some issues that need to be controlled entirely within the state, even

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damage worldwide. Terrorism

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is a global threat, which has been identified as a government-sponsored program in some

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of the world.

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, under no circumstance, the government should act to wipe out and start taking necessary steps to counteract,

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since the devastating consequences do not limit to one place.

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how to handle these kinds of trouble is purely determined by the authority of the nation, hardly, others can get involved in their home affairs. To recapitulate, there

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polemics that having an international effort should be better to solve and prevent the majority of the world's trouble. I support

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view to a certain extent. But it is a great way if every nation has an important role individually or globally to against evil.

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You need to address the task more comprehensively by providing a well-structured and fully developed response. Ensure that your ideas are clear and provide relevant examples to support your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

299 words

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Many today feel that most urgent problems can only be solved by international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many young people do not spend their holidays and weekends doing outdor activities like hiking and climbing in nstural environment. Whu is this case? How theycsn be encouraged to go out?

Many small businesses are being forced to close because they cannot compete with multinational corporations. What problems does this cause, and how can those problems be solved?

University should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject. What extent do you agree or disagree?

Some young people like to copy the behavior and clothes of famous Korean people today. Why do you think this is happening? What impacts may it have on society?