Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other while other think that people have become more independent.discuss both views and give your opinion.

People
have different views about whether we are more dependent on each other. While others believe nowadays
people
are more independent,
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think most of the society is dependent on other society. On the one hand, in ancient part public was too much dependent on rich family and landlord but
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decades ago the scenery has been changed. In
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most humans are illiterate, so that they are very much dependent on the rich class. But at present majority number of the nation are educated. So that they do the job under private companies or government service. In the modern
world
community's are not dependent but every single provincial dependent on each other. For
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most of the
country
exported oil from the middle east of the
world
like Saudi
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, the UAE, Iran etc. Without export oil from those
country
others bucolic's are totally immovable,
similarly
some nation's export electric machine and vehicles from China,Japan,the UK and so on ,
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some
first
-
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class class
country
sent money and food help to the poor
country
. So it can be said globally
people
's are dependent on each other. public certainly more independent on their personal life.
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, in
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like the USA, the UK, China, Japan, and many
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European
country
people
are much more independent. They can do anything in their personal life without a break the government role. The main reason for
this
, most of the homey are independent. So common society is totally free. The rich class community can travel anywhere
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the
world
at the same time they can choose their favourite job. Their children are
also
easygoing. In conclusion, most of the
country
are dependent on each other but the majority portion of
people
are independent in their personal life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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