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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

#people #money #support
The given chart compares the details of the underground
rail
network
 in major six cities. Overall, the information is divided in terms of their age, size, and number of the population who use them annually. It is apparent that the three oldest systems are the biggest as well as serve the highest numbers of commuters compared to the newer systems (smaller in route and number of passengers). London has the oldest underground
rail
network
, which opened in 1863.
Moreover
, it
also
 covers the longest route with approximately 400
kilometres
. The
second
 oldest underground system owned by Paris, which is just half in size that of London (200
kilometres
), but serves more people. In terms of the highest figure for passenger, the Tokyo underground
rail
network
 possesses the
first
 rank, with 1927 million commuters per year, with the
third
 number in old age. The newest structure is neither too large nor experiences a population of more than 145 million on a yearly basis, overall. The Washington DC
network
 of
rail
 is the most extensive, with the size of 126
kilometres
 and more passenger. The Los Angeles underground
rail
network
 is the newest, opened in 2001; whereas, the Kyoto system is the smallest one than all other five systems, with only 11
kilometres
 per route.
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