3.Scientists agree that many people are eating too much junk food and it is damaging their common health. Somepeoplethinkthatthisproblemscanbesolvedbyeducatingpeopletoeatlessjunk food.Otherpeoplebelievethateducationwillnotwork.Discussbothopinionsandgiveyour own opinion

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Undoubtedly, it has been proven scientifically that overconsumption of fast

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is hazardous for people's well-being. The argument as to whether or not an edification system would work as a therapeutic remedy to halt

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menace is transmuted into a moot point. I strongly accord that in spite of strong educational programmes,

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hurdle will not be curtailed, completely.

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disquisition delves into both standpoints in-depth with enough grounds. Apparently, the exponents that postulate that an enlightenment approach could promote citizen to cut down their proportion of junk

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is because when individuals see the awareness campaigns or tutorials on visual forms of how the human body stores the fat derived from fast

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items (in the form of high cholesterol and sugar level), they will definitely try to understand the consequences of

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a pattern: heart stroke, hypertension, diabetes, obesity, and so on. As a ramification of

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, they might dwindle down their dependence on ready-made

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. For exemplification, a survey by GNA (Guardian Newspaper of America) stated that in 2019, 30% of youngsters started eating homemade

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after being declared obese to prevent heart disorders.

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, could the contenders that maintain that only educative measures are not enough, be absolutely right? Certainly, it follows that today the world has been living in a fast-paced era, with increased employment and paucity of time to prepare their

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, sensitising them on reducing their fast

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habit would not work anyway. To epitomize, one interview by an eminent doctor of Nepal mentioned that by being a doctor she could not resist her craving for junk

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since she had the habit of eating sugary cake regularly.

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, the only inculcation will not work here until other restrictions are being taken by the authorities. To conclude, having explored both vantage points, I recapitulate that unhealthy eating pattern will be plummeted to a certain level by awareness campaign;

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, only education is not enough here to

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

328 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that the internet has brought people together while others think that people have become more isolated now.” Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drinks that has been scientifically to be proven detrimental people's health. to what extent do you agree or disagree

Countries should produce enough food for their own population and import as little as possible. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people’s salaries to pay for necessary public services, such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.