In developing countries, some people think governments should introduce new technology for people in order to improve the quality of life, while others believe governments should offer free education. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

In developing countries, investigating
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new
technology
or free
education
both have their strengths. I think they should be introduced and balanced at the same time. Producing new
technology
products which
is
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useful for improving the life quality of
people
and easier to make
profit
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.
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, the 5G communication
technology
, enables
people
to communicate real-time frequently
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anywhere, already being used in many mobile phones in China.
People
and countries are definitely benefiting from
this
fruit from high-tech.
However
,
technology
innovation
need
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a firm foundation of
the
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knowledge
such
as mathematics and science. It will hard to innovate an excellent and reliable product if without qualified researchers. And
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education
is playing a significant role in training researchers, especially
higher
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education
. If the
education
is no charge, more and more
people
are likely to start an
education
program like
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or doctoral program to improve themselves and create more opportunities to discover new ideas. If only pay attention to introduce new technologies, it is hard to develop a durable product. I think high-tech companies and educational institutes should have collaborations. High-tech companies should focus on the application aspects while educational institutes
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in theoretical experiments. If possible, governments should encourage the companies to support some outstanding educational institutes since it is much inexpensive
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develop a research project in a company.
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