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In the future it will become more difficult to live on Earth so more money should be spent researching how to live on other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Living on
Earth
 is becoming more challenging daily, especially for the
future
.
Therefore
, it is believed that more investments need to be made to investigate
life
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 other planets like Mars.
Although
 I strongly defend that more investment should be designated to researches, there are other priorities to investigate than
life
 outside the
Earth
.
Then
, I strongly disagree with the prompt and in
this
 essay, I will defend my opinion.
To begin
 with, living on
Earth
 is indeed struggling and the focus of governments need to be on what they have outlined as a fact not relying on a hypothesis
,
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 because
life
in
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 another planet is totally unreliable. An important illustration
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that is
 regarding
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waste. It is a fact that more garbage is being produced by human beings
,
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 because they lack strong recycle policies in
majority
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 of countries and in some, they do not even exist.
Consequently
, the garbage accumulated
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 several drawbacks worldwide.
As a result
, the government of each nation ought to invest more money in how to improve
life
 on
Earth
 not investigating
life
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other planet
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another planet
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. Another important point is that each nation should drive their efforts to investigate more the planet where they live
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 because it can bring more quality of
life
 in the
future
. Several universities in the world are capable of doing
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deep research into genetics and
human
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 brain,
for instance
,
then
, more prepared will be the society for the
future
 if a disease appears. Knowledge is undeniably important,
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 it must provide benefit for those who sponsor these studies and certainly,
population
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 prefer having their money invested
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 understanding of their species than others
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 Mars,
for example
. To conclude, I totally agree that money should be given to researches to prevent some difficult situations in the
future
.
However
, the focus needs to be on what
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society can directly profit from,
such
 as having a better quality of
life
 with less rubbish or even acquiring knowledge of their human body. I believe it is pointless to investigate
life
 in
other country
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another country
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.
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