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Many scientists are concerned about global warming. Research shows that the worldwide increase in temperature is getting worse. Furthermore, global warming seems to be related to levels of pollution in the atmosphere. Discuss the causes of global warming and possible solutions to the problem.

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Nowadays, Many specialists in the environment
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 warning that it is dangerous a rising temperature over the world.
This
 essay will examine the reasons for global warming and the solutions to the problem. There are two main reasons that destroying vegetation and making a lot of carbon footprint.
Firstly
,
people
 destroyed a huge wide area of forests and ecosystem.
For instance
, they are logging the forests to make furniture in the wood industry and to construct buildings, which is all for human's convenience.
Thus
people
 destroyed the ecosystem.
Besides
,
people
 use a lot of fossil fuels for themselves. It means that make a vast of air pollution, which can
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 the Earth gets hotter and hotter.
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, product a lot of plastic waste, cars and factories. These can give
people
 are convenient,
however
 it only for the present. In the future, it is very harmful. The effective solution is promoting
people
's awareness and regulating the natural resources are all over the world.
Firstly
,
People
 should know how serious global warming
that is
 why it needs many campaigns
such
 as advertisement in public. What's ,more The Government should play a vital role in making the limit of destroying an area of nature. Like build to factories,
thus
,it should be eco-friendly. If they destroy forests to construct build, they would pay the money for replacing them. To conclude, to prevent the Earth
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 hotter and hotter, In an aspect of countries need way more efforts for that, by regulating to destroy vegetation and animals habitats.
Then
 we can make our future generation live on a beautiful Earth.
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