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Some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too invaluable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and five your opinion.

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Introduction
According to a set of
people
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, exchanging the data related to fields like science,trade and academics entirely is a better thing ,whereas, others believe that it is not required to give out the whole details of the work.Personally, I am inclined towards the former view.
This
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Body paragraph 1
On one hand, some
people
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 expect
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transparency
 in fields like science,business and education because
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 the following reasons.
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,
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science labs conduct a lot of experiments before arriving at a final conclusion .
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 giving those details would help other aspiring scientist's research work.
Secondly
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 documents should maintain clarity in all aspects to have
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 honest deal between the individuals.
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, books related to schools and colleges are followed by many students.
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, every concept should be clearly elaborated.
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, a theorem should be explained as a whole and just giving the equation is not sufficient to get a clear idea
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Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, a set of
people
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 have a view that it is not necessary to publish everything related to
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.The main reason behind
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 is that if everything is
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feeded
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feeding
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people
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loose
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lose
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 their curiosity
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 a project.
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, some data which is
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patented
 cannot be opened up in detail.
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, one cannot use the results of some other's thesis.
Conclusion
To conclude, both
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sides have produced valid arguments.
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, I believe that exposing the entire data is beneficial in many cases and
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 I support the former argument.

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