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Should we create more socially mixed residential areas, where rich people live next to poorer people, instead of in separate communities?

#areas #people #communities
All over the
world
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 there was always a
problem
 – huge difference between wealthier and poorer
people
.
This
problem
 will be
actual
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 all the time, but I think we can do something with it. We should create more socially mixed residential
areas
, where wealthier
people
 live alongside poorer
people
,
instead
 of in separate communities. Recently, in
Europe
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 there is a
problem
 – immigrants. They are arriving in Europe night and day and there is no way to stop them. Often authorities create special districts for them and
they
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life
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 in something like a ghetto. Due to
this
 and many other problems, some of them go crazy and that’s why we can hear about terrorist and attacks on the European lifestyle. If we create more socially mixed residential
areas
,
this
problem
 maybe won’t disappear, but it will decrease. Outside Europe, in big
cities
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 there are often the poorer
people
’s districts – slums and favelas (in Brazil). The difference between
people
 living in these districts and
richer
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 part of society is huge. Of course, there are
more
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poorer
people
 than richer but I think, that we can create socially mixed residential
areas
 and try to mix richer and poorer families. When we are talking about poor
people
 we can exclude poor children. If we create socially mixed residential
areas
, they could make new friends from
this
 richer side. They would see their friends’ lifestyle and aim at it in the future. These poor children would be able to learn in normal schools, become educated and reach their target. Summing up, I hope that we can decrease
amount
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 of problems related to poor
people
 and immigrants. We should create more socially mixed residential
areas
, where wealthier
people
 live alongside poorer
people
,
instead
 of in separate communities.
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