Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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argument about the
internet
and students because they are relying on the
internet
in their
life
, and it is containing many negative effects which lead some people to narrow the usage of the
internet
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many negative
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, on that but at the same
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there is a massive of positive
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which could be helpful for them in their
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small guidance from our side as adults. In
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I will discuss both
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to clarify my opinion. From the
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point of view, the World Wide Web has their drawback and side effects.
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Consequently
, the excessive daily use from them could
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badly on their personalities, their health and
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way of thinking.
For example
, it contains many dangerous ideas which could lead the students to damage their
life
.
also
, there is a huge number of bad
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which could destroy their healthiness.
On the other hand
, there are a million
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amazing pages which can guide them to build their skills and know a thousand of information because it
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many best practices in a
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positive
life
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, we can find a thousand
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positive ideas and information related to
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matter in so many sectors. And if we will talk about
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search engine, we can find a massive of data and information about many wonderful things in
this
world. In conclusion, the
internet
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negative and positive
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. And we should take everything in our consideration and try to guide them to the right track.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
  • hinder
  • crucial
  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
  • engagement
  • adaptivity
  • personalized learning
  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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