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It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history rather than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#schoolchildren #history #world
Nowadays, there are several
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 of thoughts about
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children's
 consideration
towards
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history
. While a
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group
 of
people
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claims
 that world
history
 should be learners' concern, I fully hold that
students
 must gain a deeper insight into their local background since it helps them to boost their social roles in societies.
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 my perspective, there are some reasons that
children
 should be taught about regional
history
.
Firstly
,
such
 an attitude will assist them to promote a
sence
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sense
 of national and regional identity.
This
 is because many stories that are related to a particular area are full of
events
 that act
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 incentive for
young
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the young
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 generation to get involved in social matters.
For example
, in Iran's
history
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,history
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 there are numerous
events
,
such
 as
Rome
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 occupation, that inspire young
people
 to sign up in their army since
such
people
 are motivated to defend their values against any enemies.
Therefore
. studying
a
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local
history
 in schools can have significant influences on
children
's mind when they reach adulthood.
Moreover
, the aforementioned approach not
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only
 strengthen the
sence
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sense
 of patriotism among
children
, but
also
 may help them to acquire a deeper understanding of their own cultures. It means that regional
history
 has the power to present the
events
 and customs that are alien to
students
. More
presicely
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precisely
,
minority
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a minority
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 of schoolchildren have an exhaustive knowledge about Norouz ceremonies in Iran since many of them deem that
such
events
 are just for giving and receiving gifts. But, What these
students
 fail to see is that the main concept of Norouz customs is enriching social values and morals , among which are respect and honesty.
Thus
, learning historical background will lead
children
 to assimilate into their culture and embrace ethical beliefs more easily. Despite that, a number of
people
asserts
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 that understanding global
history
 is an
essentail
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essential
 element in
schoolchildren
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the schoolchildren
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 learning process since it may assist them to communicate with other societies when they get older.
Nevertheless
,
this
 group of individuals have failed to consider the role of internal
history
 because
students
 without studying their own
haritage
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heritage
 are not able to absorb
foreigner
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 stories. In conclusion,
although
 some
people
 are in favour of teaching
world's
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 past stories to
students
, I contend that
children
 in
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order
 to improve their cultural
indentity
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identity
 are required to
rise
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raise
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 their knowledge about their ancestors.
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