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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages ?

#people #risks #lives
Many
people
 like to say that if you need something, you need to take a risk to succeed in your personal and professional life. Of course,
this
 statement has advantages and
also
 disadvantages.
Although
, in my opinion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand, minuses of risks. Many
people
 are scared to lose something, and
this
 will be true if humans do not see and underestimate all the risks that can lead to other difficult and complicated situations in the future.
For instance
, my best friend wanted to earn money with crypto in Binance and Okx,
such
 as cool and successful men on TikTok or YouTube. He sold his own computer and ex-mobile phone.
However
, after that, he lost all his money,and state and doesn't talk with his own father. His main mistake was that he was very impulsive and too self-confident and now he is all in debt.
On the other hand
, if everyone follows the rules and recommendations and
also
 will prepare for all the tasks and learn things about the topic anyone can make a profit and win.
For example
, Sun-Zi had said in his book "Art of War"
firstly
 that if you want to win, you need to make a condition for victory.
People
 always want to improve their lives and situations everywhere. Even with a lack of someone it is not enough to be in the right place at the right time. Only in hard situations,
people
 can think to their maximum. There are millions of individuals who take and get what they want in the whole world. For these reasons, I prefer to say that risk is not always about debts and unsuccessful but
also
 about using instincts and skills at the top.
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coherence cohesion
Clear structure with a defined introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
Addresses both advantages and disadvantages of taking risks, providing a balanced view.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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