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Some people say that no one should work after the age of 65years,others say that they should continue the work as long as they want.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is true that many countries have different retirement
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 for their citizens. While some feel that they must
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 till 65 years, I,
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, agree with those who feel that they must be allowed to
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 as per their need. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will explain both sides and share my opinion with relevant examples. On the one side, it could be argued that
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 limit on the working professional's life is essential as it can allow them to spend some quality time with their families.
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, a grandparent can apprise his grandchildren about their cultural values if he spends his time with his family rather than in an office.
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, their future generations might follow the family traditions.
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, if workers have to
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 till the 65 of their
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, they might help other family members dedicatedly with their lifelong experiences.
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, a retired father can teach his child about money management at a tender
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 as he has no official pressure. Owing to
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, the child can understand the value of money and might start saving his pocket money for the future. On the other side, I firmly believe that there should not be any
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 limit on the
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 as some
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 get satisfaction from their
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. Take a bank manager,
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, who works around the clock at an early
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 to get his dream job.
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,
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reaching a certain
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 and stopping him from doing his favourite
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, can put mental pressure on him.
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, many
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 often want to contribute to their country's economy despite their
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. If they stopped doing their job at a certain
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, they would become an extra burden on their nation. So, in order to stimulate the economy, many
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 must keep doing their job as long as they want. In conclusion,
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 limiting
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 to certain years of life can give an opportunity to working parents to spend some time with their families, it can take their freedom as many
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 enjoy their jobs and help their nation's economy.
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, I believe that we must let everyone
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 without thinking about their
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.

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