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Some people think that the best way to improve road transport safe is to let the driver test each year. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that
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 security has become a huge problem in many countries. In my view, solving
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 problem is unlikely to need a simple ever-year
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 examination. While it is undeniable that the behaviour of the
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 is one of the main causes of
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accidents
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, the
test
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 of the
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 is unlikely to significantly regulate the misbehaviour of drivers. As some
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 who are not considered the driving
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 is important, they just regard the driving
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 as a task that had to accomplish rather than a way to improve their driving safety.
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,
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test
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 cannot serve their purpose very well. But there are various other measures that would have huge effects on addressing deteriorating
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 safety. A better solution to tackle
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accidents
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 is to severely punish drivers who have unresponsible behaviours. It is undeniable that some transport
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 are caused by
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’s distraction
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 as checking messages on mobile phones or having calls with others. If these drivers could be punished harshly,
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 as charging a hefty fine or putting them into prison, they will reflect on their misbehaviours and learn a lesson from it, which can prevent them from inconsiderate behaviours.
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, it
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 can have a deterrent effect on other
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.
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, if some
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 want to use mobile phones when they are driving, they could consider the severe consequences, and
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 terminate dangerous behaviours, curbing transport
accidents
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 directly. In conclusion,
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 the
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test
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 is useful for
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 to go over the
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 regulations,
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 solution is not the best one because not a lot of
people
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 would treat it correctly.
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, we should seek other better solutions
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 as harsh punishments.
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