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‘Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity.’ How far do you share this viewpoint?

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There is an idea that those who earn an income should give a regular percentage of money to support benevolence. I do not deny
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 someone needs to help, but
this
doesn
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does
't mean that everyone must afford currency to
charity
. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain my opinion in detail. Primarily, It seems that the poor and middle-class families whose wages are the principal source of income
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 insufficient money.
In other words
, Much of their salary is spent
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them
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their
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household
spendings
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spending
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,
such
 as food, clothing, housing (rent), energy, transport, and miscellaneous services. If wages increase smaller than inflation, they can not afford their consumption expenditure
contributes to
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 perhaps impossible to give
charity
.
Finally
, there is an almost universal consensus that contributors to
charity
 support various things
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other than
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 money.
For example
, the United Nations give relief food, medicine, and clothes to natural disaster or humanitarian crisis countries.
In addition
, some individuals volunteer for public health, animal care, women's empowerment, etc.
While
 it may be correct that there are some positives to
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 a certain amount of their income to
charity
. Most notably, If the
donators
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donors
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 set a scheduled fixed donation each month for a particular
charity
, that can motivate them to be more proactive to
charity
.
However
, Not everyone will be able to donate regularly, which can cause a decline in participants
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 the fundraiser. It is sensible
to conclude
 that, Monetary
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fixed
donate
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 is not the only way to reach the
charity
, and if you wanted to give things, it would positively help any other.
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