Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views about the place where to cultivate kids to be
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in society. While school acts an important role in influence
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students' moral and emotional development, I strongly believe that family education is more fundamental and essential
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of children's character . On one hand, school as a microcosm of the universe is the
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place for
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to get to know the real world.
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learning knowledge is the key task to them, the value of personal socialization growing is
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as what they gain inside
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, and which school can offer both.
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, kids will make friends, and
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will have arguments with mates, how to deal with conflicts is a basic social skill they need to practice, of course, they shall
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know how to corporate with others.
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, they shall understand social responsibility and how to contribute by the combination with what they acquire from their tutors and schoolmates.
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, parents are the beginning teacher and
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friend of a child,
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, they accompany each other
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a long life journey and study a lot of things together. That's why
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and
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have
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chance to be their
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model as well.
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, my husband is very interested in history and read many books at home,
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impact reflects on my daughter, she forms
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good
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in reading since she was only three years old and she
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like humanities indeed.
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, she gets to know the view of the world
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than the same age girls and
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her most
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activity is to debate with her father
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the weekend. According to my personal experience, I would argue that the importance of family education is
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to see, it is
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long time support for youngsters to truly achieve their value through their whole life. In conclusion, I believe that both educational institutions and parents play
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significant roles to train the boys and girls to be useful members
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society, and most of
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with the interactions which help get the best results,
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, the influence of home education which matters more in the long run.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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