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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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It is true that a massive amount of
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 is being thrown daily. There are a number of reasons behind
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 phenomenon, and several solutions should be adopted to improve
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 situation. Nowadays, human is making more and more
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 from agriculture, in some places, the farming production surpasses the demand. The reason for it is that the development of technology in biology, machinery has dramatically increased productivity in the agriculture sector.
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, the new rice species called S21 which was announced in Vietnam
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 year, s21's output is double than the traditional rice. S21 rice is easy to raise, a good defence against bugs and durability in any weather condition.
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, people who leave in the city have a higher requirement of the living standard. They have a stable financial status and healthy living style,
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 they tend to
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 the remaining
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 which is considered dirty, unhealthy and unusable. Since
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 issues are serious, there are many steps that should be taken immediately to address these problems. The
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 solution would be starting from the education system which should introduce
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-wasting as a primary topic for the children. Some field trips can be conducted to educate the children about the value of the
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, the cost of
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 disposal and the existence of many poverty people. The
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 measure would be that the government should impose some punishment on the
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 waster. As the result, they will be more aware of the problem and reconsider before discarded any
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 in the dustbin. In conclusion,
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 waste is a serious issue in the modern world because of the high productivity and healthy living style. Appropriate steps need to be taken to tackle these problems.
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