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society is based on rules and laws. It could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do. Do you agree?

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There are
opinons
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opinions
 that rules and
laws
 are indispensable for keeping
the
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society from any disruption. In my opinion,
such
 legal boundary assists on
maintain
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 the social fairness and security.
To begin
 with, legal principles
standadize
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standardize
standardized
 social behaviours thanks to clearly specified decrees that are widely applied
on
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 every citizen no matter what their social status or economical backgrounds are. Indeed, legislation is founded on life situations and able to
clairify
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clarify
 between right or illegal behaviours so that conflicts and disputes are reasonably resolved.
Therefore
, wrong-doers who violated
laws
 will be strictly punished and those obey principle and have significant contributions will be complimented and rewarded.
Moreover
,
crime
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 rate could be reduced and society will be more secured if rules and
laws
 are effectively enforced by authorities. To be specific, citizens can be
awared
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aware
awarded
 of compulsory manners or those
are
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 banned and try their best to not cross the red line and not to be punished.
Consequently
, severe law orders help to prevent illegal doing and decrease the number of criminals. In conclusion, I believe that
implementation
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 of rules and
laws
 by government and court is necessary to keep society function while people still have their freedom justifiable but within the limit set by legislation.
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