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Many people believe that eighteen years old is the appropriate age to finish school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Should students finish school at
age
 18? ,Statistically in
USA
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 most schools graduate their students at 18 rather than 16. I believe that when a student graduates at 18 they will be more mature and better prepared for the world.
To begin
 with, 18-year-olds are more like adults rather than teenagers. Research shows that when a person reaches
age
 18, he or she will be more mature. In most countries, at
this
age
 teenagers are allowed to drive, marry, and own a house. They do not need to depend on a guardian.
Furthermore
, at 18 ,
usually
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 people are a lot smarter, and they will have had 2 years extra education.
Consequently
, they will be able to find better jobs and perhaps move on to higher studies.
In addition
, 18-year-olds are better at managing finances so they will not waste money like younger kids.
On the other hand
, when a person graduates early at only 16, he or she can begin to take advantage of all the opportunities.
For instance
, they can enter a college and
further
 increase their qualifications.
This
 system is more common in countries in Europe.
In addition
, they can start working early to save money.
This
 will enable them perhaps invest their money or buy a house.
Furthermore
, many companies take on 16 years olds to work in important positions. A friend of mine started working for a company at 17 and he is now a Senior Accountant at a very young
age
. To sum up,
although
 there some benefits of graduating at a young
age
, I believe students should be patient until 18.
Thus
 their knowledge and maturity will be far greater.
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