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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
Reading news is undoubtedly one of the common daily
routine
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 for most people. Some suggest that
these printed information
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 will disappear in the near future as the Internet can provide all the materials we need for free. Yet,
besides
 economical
reason
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reasons
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, I believe there are other major reasons leading to the phenomenon.
Initially
, it is more convenient to read using electronic devices. Compared to the traditional printed newspapers and books which are heavy and thick,
the
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mobile phones or computers act as a great alternative for reading. They are light to carry and easy to use.
Furthermore
, the content on the Internet is extremely high. Readers can access
to
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endless information with few clicks. The printed one,
however
, due to the limitation of
paper
, hardly can they include
such
 wide range of information. Another factor is that
the
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public awareness
in
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 the environment has increased. To be more specific, modern people are aware of the impact of extreme
paper
 usage. It is high usage of
paper
 results in the mass reduction of the trees in
forest
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the forest
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. According to a recent study, because of the significant amount in
paper
 consumption,
global
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 total forest area has been reduced
more
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 than fifty
percent
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 in the
last
 decade. In order to reduce to use of
paper
 and restore the forest area, individuals nowadays are less likely to buy printed products. In conclusion, I personally agree that the
customers
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 of
paper
 products will decrease drastically, due to the reasons of raised public awareness and convenience, rather than
economical
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the economical
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 factor only.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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