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English is becoming the most prominent language in the world. Do the advantages of having only one language in the world outweigh the disadvantages?

#english #language #world
The English
language
 has gained popularity across the globe. Though the benefits of having a single
language
 across most
of
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the
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nations cannot be undermined,
but
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it carries
risk
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 of
extinction
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 of
traditional
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language
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. In
this
 essay, I will explain the merits and demerits of one universal
language
.
Firstly
,
single
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language
through out
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 the world
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 to the ease of work in all sectors like education, industries,
medical
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, etc. People
of
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 different regions can express their views comfortably and it will improve
the
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interpersonal relationships.
Secondly
, learning too many languages for an individual is
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cumbersome and having a single
language
 has reduced
this
 burden.
On the contrary
, it carries some drawbacks of the disappearance of the traditional
language
 and culture. Each culture has some peculiarities and importance which need to
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 and
it's
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 elimination will be
disasterous
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disastrous
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World
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 will be deprived of the
gaining
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positives
from
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 that culture. Saving the old traditional methods is the need of
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 for each of us. In conclusion,
single
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 universal no doubt
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 off
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 of obstacles but it can lead to destruction of the tradition and heritage.
Younger
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 generation will no longer be able to relish the old traditions.
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task achievement
The essay should include more specific examples to support the main points discussed about the advantages and disadvantages of a universal language.
coherence cohesion
Try to refine sentence structure and grammar to convey ideas more clearly and accurately.
task achievement
Ensure precise and varied vocabulary usage to convey ideas more effectively.
task achievement
The essay articulates both advantages and disadvantages of having one universal language, providing a balanced view.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clearly defined, effectively framing the essay's content.
coherence cohesion
The essay conveys a logical structure by outlining merits and demerits in separate paragraphs.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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