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Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. How far do you share this viewpoint?

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Donation is one of the valuable contributions to society.
However
, it is a controversial view that a certain amount of earnings should be devoted to
charity
. Personally, I disagree with
this
 opinion due to the following reasons, and I will explain them.
First
 of all, not all people have the financial ability to donate a specific amount of their salary to
charity
 because most of them struggle to meet their needs and support their families with their finite income. By
this
, I mean that the majority of earnings covers the common cost of living expenses
such
 as rent, food, transportation, child care and health care no matter how much they earn. It is unlikely left behind for endowment.
Secondly
, fundraising should be formed by voluntary participation without any regulation or inducement as the original meaning of
charity
 is based on kindness, emotional satisfaction gained by giving.
Third
, there are numerous methods for people to involve in
charity
 works
such
 as donating blood, teaching a lesson to the orphanage or even becoming an organ donor without not only contributing money. It is true that a fixed amount of money is beneficial for
charity
 organizations and social goods. Despite
this
, it is not
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 for all. In conclusion, it appears to me that everybody cannot take part in
charity
 because of
above-mentioned
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