Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides & give your opinion.
In the
last
decades, we have shown an increasing growth in communication applications which are mainly used over the internet. The usage of these applications, such
as Facebook, Twitter, Snapchat, ...and etc, make some People
much closer to the world, Fix capitalization
people
in contrast
, make
other Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
people
separated. This
essay will discuss both sides and introduce my point of view.
On the one hand, the existence of the internet in our lives
, make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
people
easily exchange their news
around the world. For example
, if one has a special occasion, he can share
his party with his family and his friend
even if they are living in a different country. Fix the agreement mistake
friends
Thus
, it is clear how the internet has made people
feel close together.
On the other hand
, it is popularly
that Change the word
popular
people
tend to share
their news
, their special parties, and their interests with other people
who live away and who do not have any relation with them, but at the same time, they tend to keep themselves away from their neighbours or their relatives
.In other words
, they isolate themselves locally however
, they do not mind sharing their news
with anyone who is outside their countries, cities, and towns. I expect that because they do not want to allow anyone
of their Correct your spelling
any
relatives
to interfere in their lives
, since the others can not affect their lives
because they are already outside their home town.
In my opinion, I totally agree with both points of view, and that is
because I have noticed that most people
tend to hide their private lives
from their relatives
or their friends to protect their privacy. So, most of the time, they keep themselves away from their neighbourhood, relatives
and friends. They, for instance
, virtually share
their updates with their family who lives
far away, but they do not prefer to Correct subject-verb agreement
live
share
the same updates with their close family, neighbours, or friends in real life. so the people
who are
live Verb problem
apply
part
away feel they are close when they exchange their updates, Correct your spelling
far
in contrast
, the close people
feel isolated from each other when they do not take part in relatives
' events in real life.
To conclude
, sometimes, we can not understand why people
prefer sharing their news
with those who are living away from them, but they absolutely do not like sharing the same news
with other people
who are close to them, and they tend to isolate themselves local
.Change the adjective
locally
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